What is this? (Poem)

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What is this? (Poem)

Postby JamesDavid » Fri Aug 31, 2012 12:40 am

Thought 1:

How can I just coast along,
without knowing where I'm from,
who was here before I was,
like the Man who spilled His blood,
saved the world from certain doom,
yet He's ignored, cursed and shooed,
always being thrown aside,
all along I run and hide?
How could I be worthy of
the love of One from high above?

Thought 2:

Of course as we all grow up,
we see the people run a muck.
They seem like lines upon a page,
with a glance they're all so vague.
Do you ever think: Where do they go?
Or wonder how the flowers grow?
Or how the sky can stay so blue,
when all things we do pollute?

Thought 3:

With nothing to do time drips by,
as you have nothing to occupy.
But if you have a task at hand,
time just seems at an end.
So is it that our minds warp time?
Or do we have a clock inside,
with gears that flip our universe?
Oh come now! Don't be absurd!
How could that be possible?
If it's so, who is responsible?

The end?:

I sit alone sometimes in bed,
with thoughts like these inside my head.
My clock rings out: "Tick Tock Tick",
and I wonder: What is this?
For by grace are ye saved through faith, that not of yourselves, lest any man should boast.

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Re: What is this? (Poem)

Postby ccgr » Fri Aug 31, 2012 8:41 am

Nice I like the first one the best. The second one had me distracted with what work you would find to rhyme with muck. ;)

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Re: What is this? (Poem)

Postby JamesDavid » Fri Aug 31, 2012 10:58 am

Nice I like the first one the best. The second one had me distracted with what work you would find to rhyme with muck. ;)
Well the explanation of this poem is sort of simple: before I understood my salvation in Christ, these are the thoughts that would enter my head. See, I have an overactive brain. I can think and process many thoughts at once and perform ordinary tasks at the same time. Before Christ is was things like that, things that sort of make no since.

It would have been very difficult to rhyme muck, would it not?
For by grace are ye saved through faith, that not of yourselves, lest any man should boast.

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Re: What is this? (Poem)

Postby DeadManReedeemed » Fri Aug 31, 2012 7:39 pm

Sweet.
“The humble sinner will sometimes be interpreted as one of the filthiest in the eyes of man yet immersed in the eyes of God, and this is due to the volition of honesty regarding his own corruption.”

― Criss Jami

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Re: What is this? (Poem)

Postby Chozon1 » Sat Sep 01, 2012 11:25 pm

Gewd stuff dude.
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Re: What is this? (Poem)

Postby JamesDavid » Sun Sep 02, 2012 10:25 am

Thank you, I'm glad you all like it. :)
For by grace are ye saved through faith, that not of yourselves, lest any man should boast.

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Re: What is this? (Poem)

Postby DaveyWavey » Wed Jul 22, 2015 6:34 am

That is a very very nice poem :D I should take some time to write something like that. Last poetry I wrote was when I was a kid haha. Mmmm very deep.


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